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i  compare my bad dreams with memories of last summer.
our fingers show in all the photos, long dark and crooked like tangled telephone wires desperately delivering you the wrong persons voice.
every letter we wrote will be devoured by circumstance.

you've long since disappeared and i'm standing crippled at the crossroads, choking on the dust our choices left behind.
©2008-2009 ~withL0VE
:iconwithl0ve:

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okay, first of all, what the fuck is with these categories. i can't just post a poem? i never knew there were so many different names for a poem. shiet.

anyway, i usually never put writing on DA because i don't like the format for it, but i guess i just felt like it. probably won't be up for long though.

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:iconrainydaydarling:
oh. Why not.
I love it.
I wish there was more.
It's beautiful.

--
Anyone can state facts they believe to be true,
but it takes a true artist to lie about the world.


there's a story here
:iconwithl0ve:
thanks. writing's my true love to be honest.
:iconcnazrael:
"you've long since disappeared and i'm standing crippled at the crossroads, choking on the dust our choices left behind"

HOLY SHIT!! So much power...I like the whole thing a lot.
:iconrainydaydarling:
Yeah.
Me too.
But I guess that's kinda obvious.

--
Anyone can state facts they believe to be true,
but it takes a true artist to lie about the world.


there's a story here
:iconprestonmeyers:
i loves this too. though, "crossroads" is so cliché that i feel it takes away from the powerful ending. plus, i read "choking on the dust" and already thought of a road.

--
kiss me with your cherry lipstick,
never wash you off my face.
hit me, i can take your cheap shot,
leave you with the love we made.
:iconwithl0ve:
thanks!! yeah i know it's super cliche but where it's coming from in my head i need that to be there. if that makes any sense.. thank you so much for the crit though!

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